Storyline ideas

I need a copy of the storyline for the game pitch. if anyone has any good ideas that should be put into the storyline post it here

here is the handwritten version of things that we are going to include within the game, I will re-type it later to make it more legible.

Here is a rough idea for a story, any changes you want me to make, just respond.

Storyline Beta

DarkNight steals the power of the sun, to make eternal night of the Shining Isles, to strengthen his minions and his powers, and to ruin the possibility of solar power and increase the sales of his halogen lamps. To make sure his plan works, he attacks and kidnaps “The Ninjas”, the small group of people devoted to protecting the Shining Isles form all manner of evil and cheap housing development. Fortunately, Leo, the leader of “The Ninjas” was on holiday in Las Vegas and avoided DarkNights forces from capturing him. With eternal night, no friends, darkness ruling and no one to clean to house after the most recent house party, and generally nothing better to do, Leo sets out to save his friends and the Shining Isles for DarkNights somewhat-evil scheme.